I don't really think Oreos are as addictive as cocaine.Because in my opion Oreos are good but they are not to the point where i just can't stop eating.My only addiction though is Honey Buns i can't get enough of them.Oreo's probably are America's favorite cookie,or Milk's favorite cookie.Eventually everyone will stop eating Oreo's pertaining to the high obesity rate and how supposedly addictive they are.They tested it on rat's so that is a whole other difference than humans are.Wer have different functions than they do,and different diets.
"Researchers tested rats' affinity for the chocolatey sandwich cookie in several lab experiments. Co-author Jamie Honohan explained that Oreos were chosen not only for their taste, but because they have high amounts of fat and sugar and are marketed heavily in areas where people tend to have lower socioeconomic status and higher obesity rates.
Why would you give cocaine to rat's.I am still not grasping that.Do scientists have nothing better to do.They should be finding a cure for Cancer because it is the number one killer in the whole world.But i do understand obesity rates have been going up the last couple of years.And they are worried about our health.Cancer is more important than obesity in my eyes.
I think that this is really well written. A suggestion that I would make is that you define your topic a little better because I was confused on what it was about. Also, something that would just make it look a little more organized is to make sure that you have the formatting the same for all of the words. When you start a new topic you should start a new paragraph this will make the blog look neater and make more sense.
ReplyDeleteNice job on your blog. The only thing I would fix is the format of it. It's a lot of text together and I kinda didn't won't to finish reading the bottom part. Just make sure you organize your blog more and revise it before you submit. I do agree with you though I like oreos but I don't think they are addicting. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteNice job, Shawn! You incorporated your personal thoughts in there very well. I agree that scientist need to focus more on finding a cure for cancer than experimenting with rats on obesity. Oreos are a delicious treat, however, I also feel that they can not be as addicting as cocaine. One thing I would change is how you write your blog. Instead of writing one big paragraph you should divide it into smaller, easier to read paragraphs. Also, you may need to watch the font change. You may also need to summarize your article a little bit more. Other than that, keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteLove the idea of the Oreo blog. The different fonts were confusing. I didn't understand the quote or if it even was a quote. This can all be fixed by rereading and looking back over what you wrote.
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